brittle light

Oct 03, 2012 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Mischief

light flickers and glows
fickle and fancy in manner
illuminating illusion,
delusion,
and the almighty hallucination
playing hocus pocus
with the mind's eye,
teasing truth to tears

I've seen love in pink charade
death as escapade
monsters grining from under the bed
jaunty parades of the lingering dead

light,
forever the cosmic clown,
wildly firing jolts and bolts,
knows no bounds of brilliance
or terror

taming this game maker
this soul shaker
is a natural activity for
players of any age

now, how clearly do you see

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: upstate New York USA, USA

Comments

Esker

12 years 9 months ago

sHEEnyman oh tatter maker

the escapade
flow
sunsets magic hue

the floorboard mystery
when winter cracks her
knuckles in the attic

Great write!!

the journey
from the window
ajar
the sheet metal
cruise...

Thank You

brittle light

12 years 9 months ago

things that go bump in the

things that go bump in the night....with pictures!

the floorboard mystery
when winter cracks her
knuckes in the attic....... that cracked me up!

thanks for your gracious comment

Rula

12 years 9 months ago

oh wow! I really don't know how fast this reads but it caught my breath till the end when I read your question. I thought I am almost blind but shall re-read though I doubt that would make any difference.

I believe you have a brilliant choice of words to achieve your goal and the internal rhyme works really great!

brittle light

12 years 9 months ago

our first meeting, so...

our first meeting, so....Hello

I made some small edits to this since you first read it. I don't know if that will clear things up. I am glad you could enjoy some of the words and rhymes .

thanks for stopping by

Ian.T

12 years 9 months ago

BL

A very good write you enlightened me lol great theme and well set out, this needs a quiet read to absorb, Yours Ian.T

brittle light

12 years 9 months ago

thanks Ian

wesley snow

12 years 9 months ago

Our first meet also Al,

the style is not my favorite, but I agree with Rula that it roars along with the speed of... well, maybe not that fast, but fast! It was almost a little Dr. Suess like without the cutsie (I'm a fan, so I'm not picking on you). Nymph like it bounces here and there, hard to catch.
Strong language use. Well met.
wesley

brittle light

12 years 9 months ago

glad to finally meet

I've made some more edits to this...a never ending process!

thanks for your thoughts...and, yes, you and I have very different styles...but I shan't hold that against you. As they say "variety is spice" ..."live and let......"

thanks again