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Michael Anthony
Michael Anthony
Aug 17, 2023 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Misfire of the Heart

Her feelings and attachments
always felt messy.
Wild and uncharted too.

Attending to them was work for us both.
Broken sometimes works out,
but I had to walk away this time.

Not because I didn't care,
but I just couldn't breathe underneath
the weight of all her damage.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: San Francisco Bay Area - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Bukowski, Billy Collins, Ted Kooser, Haiku & Harvey Kurtzman (a visual poet, of sorts)

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Lavender

Lavender

1 year 11 months ago

Misfire of the Heart

Hello, Michael,
I feel the heaviness in this, and then the relief. It reminds me of Rumi: "Life is a balance of holding on and letting go." I like the brevity of the three line stanzas. There is a sharp sense of realization.
L