Missing In Plain Sight

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Missing In Plain Sight" effectively uses rhetorical questions to provoke thought and engage the reader in the issue of hunger and food insecurity. The use of simple, direct language makes the message clear and accessible to a broad audience.

However, the poem could benefit from more vivid, specific imagery. For instance, instead of stating "They are the hungry / And the food insecure," it might be more impactful to describe the physical and emotional effects of hunger. This would allow the reader to empathize more deeply with the subjects of the poem.

The poem also tends to tell rather than show. For example, "In a land full of plenty / There should be no excuse" could be more effectively communicated through a concrete example that contrasts abundance and scarcity.

Finally, the poem's rhythm and rhyme scheme are somewhat inconsistent, which can be distracting for the reader. For instance, the second stanza has an ABAB rhyme scheme, while the third stanza uses an AABB rhyme scheme. Consistency in rhyme and rhythm can help to create a more satisfying reading experience.

In summary, while the poem effectively communicates its message, it could be improved through the use of more specific imagery, showing rather than telling, and a more consistent rhyme and rhythm.

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a sad picture, but you have to wonder, about the scenario here. Is it all a plot to keep the population under control? Make the populace so dependent on the government, that there is blind obedience? Or is it just incompetence of said government? Hard to know these days. Anyway, we should indeed worry about the disadvantaged, whoever they are. Nicely done. ~ Geez.
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their pain is palpable, and evident. Let's concentrate on making it better. Then we can worry about who is to blame. ~ Geezer.
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Hello, William,
Very compassionate poem. Your 11 million stat is shocking, which I'm certain is your intent - to open eyes and bring awareness. Thank you for this.
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This was superbly written and through your words 11 million and two fold are now seen. Each line was more powerful than the last and definitely made me think of all those hungry souls. A very sad topic indeed, and so important to bring to light for change.

This was superbly written and through your words 11 million and two fold are now seen. Each line was more powerful than the last and definitely made me think of all those hungry souls. A very sad topic indeed, and so important to bring to light for change.