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Mistress of Winds And Rains

Mouth is sweet with poems
Vulva is still sweeter

Morning she picks a fight
Evening she is eager to embrace:

I love you more than her
Forget about those words

Wind and rain a cosmic
Copulation Immaculate Girl

Zither poised for music
Or love

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Country/Region: The Celestial River

Favorite Poets: Shane MacGowan, Dylan Thomas, Qays ibn Al-Mulawwah, Wallada bint al-Mustakfi, Rumi, Khalil Gibran, Yona Wallach, Arthur Rimbaud, Paul Eluard, Brendan Behan, James Clarence Mangan, William Blake, Tom Waits, Charles Bukowski, Forough Farrokhzad, Thomas Chatterton

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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Mistress of Winds And Rains" explores themes of love, conflict, and cosmic elements. The juxtaposition of the sweetness of poems with the sweetness of the vulva creates an interesting contrast. The shifts in tone from picking a fight in the morning to being eager to embrace in the evening add depth to the portrayal of the mistress. The imagery of wind and rain as a cosmic copulation is vivid and evocative. However, there are some abrupt transitions in the poem that could be smoothed out for better flow and coherence. Additionally, the use of symbols like the zither could be further developed to enhance the overall meaning of the poem. Consider refining the structure and symbolism to strengthen the impact of the poem on the reader.

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