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lou
lou

Mockery

Pale copy duplicated
Echo of words already spoken
Thin gruel 

Praise caught in someone else's
applause
Sallow reflection

Similarity but no direction
A rejection 
No substance

Cracked version of  an original
fake, a sham
A mockery of viewers intelligence   

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: West London, GBR

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda , Jack Kerouac, Alan Ginsberg, D.H Lawrence, Jim Morrison's lyrics,

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Comments

Roscoe Lane

Roscoe Lane

13 years 11 months ago

Sounds like,

Sounds like our government, cracked version of an original fake, Intresting to see these lines put to poetry. I like it. Regards Roscoe...

lou

lou

13 years 11 months ago

Roscoe

Thank you.

Lou

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

13 years 11 months ago

Dear Lou,

I agree with Roscoe. A good write on a gloomy subject.

always, cat

lou

lou

13 years 11 months ago

Cat

Thank you

Lou

Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

13 years 11 months ago

lou

pligerism is a terrible thing. I see it offen. it can never be as good as the real thing. because the feeling can not be duplicated.

very good write buddy.
Eddie

lou

lou

13 years 11 months ago

Eddie

you understood this poem perfectly.

love lou

lou

lou

13 years 11 months ago

Xena

Thank you,

glad that you agree, I try to be original.

Lou

lou

lou

13 years 11 months ago

Yes

You are right, not always an acceptable thing in some peoples' view.

Lou

Hooded Stranger

Hooded Stranger

13 years 11 months ago

Lou

Lou,

has someone plagarised your work?...or is this just a theme?

I liked each stanza...the message was clear.

Particularly liked this line:

Praise caught in someone else's
applause.

I have been accused of plagarism...obvioulsy not true, but to be accused of it makes you feel totally sick...especially when you have to defend and prove your work is original when you have done nothing wrong. The accuser is allowed to make a false statement and then run away...she knows who she is and I await her return!

regards,

HS (not bitter at all!! LOL!)

lou

lou

13 years 11 months ago

Dan

This poem is not based on personal experience.

I know that it is horrible to be wrongly acused, and I'm sure you will be vindicated.

Lou

Hooded Stranger

Hooded Stranger

13 years 11 months ago

Lou

Lou,

yes I have been vindicated, but the wound is raw and has left me with a bitter taste in my mouth.

Glad your poem is not based on personal experience,

HS

lou

lou

13 years 11 months ago

Dan

It is bound to take time to get over something like that, but the person who accused you will get what they deserve, don't usually use this word, but in this case karma will have it's way.

Lou