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A moment in the mortuary
stagnant bodies
starring continuously,
as if to talk, to walk, to jump
one asked a question
why toiling, why struggle?
this manure body of the earth,
and the divorced breath soul.
take a walk here with me,
where stars seize to shine
golds seize to glitter
where the strong and the weak harmonize,
where the poor and the rich unites
life is a journey, journey it well,
I took a moment to the mortuary.
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Marvel Godwyn
7 years 7 months ago
A moment in the mortuary is
A moment in the mortuary is indeed a moment of solemnity.A nicely woven piece. Thanks for sharing Chiori.