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Feb 20, 2023
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A MOMENT IN TIME
Step into His presence
The eternal now
Walk through portals of time
Anywhere you wish
Anywhere you desire
Walk into the past
And then into the future
A place where time and space
Know no restrictions
Pass through portals
Of brilliant white light
To view life's last struggle
Your personal fight!
Forge your way through
Remembering the joy and the pain
All in but a moment
At many windows of time
Faces laughing, faces born in shame
Faces smiling and those born in chains
Please don’t judge, but kindly observe
Being in that moment
Is an experience
That we will forever preserve
Whether here or there
It’s what we deserve
Embracing the wonder
Of a glorious new world
A sea of glass
From whose vision
Nothing will be withheld!
Inheriting our hearts
Fondest desire
Beginning to understand
Who had gently
Guided us there!
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Rosewood Apothecary
2 years 4 months ago
I agree
To view life(‘)s last struggle
Get that apostrophe in there I think.
All in but a moment
At many windows of time
Faces laughing, faces born in shame
Faces smiling and those born in chains
That’s a good grouping of lines right there. I believe that’s the peak of the poem and then we kind of slowly come down to land.
Tim
Seren
2 years 4 months ago
Dear Aesthetic Night
It's like a Symphony with the build up and I think Tim's spot on with those lines they're the peak and then we gently come back to earth.
Sigh this is wonderful.
Kind regards Seren
Leslie
2 years 4 months ago
A MOMENT IN TIME!
Thank you to everyone reading this! I hope that any comments I I leave with you bring a smile to your face!