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Jan 06, 2011
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MONO SPLICE
stub of dream
auxilliary sub beat
flashs of bright true image
I can hear the creak
like light on that shutter blade
as it flicks the scene
this drone of now
submersed in fluid
ease
the face says
this
the body says there
and the soul hurls
against the wretched
flight in exstacy
this burning wish
flaring like a strobe
and all dark angles
jutting
sharp as a blade
on velvet
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Esker
14 years 6 months ago
Longo
i do the best to make new language of old
words one merely has to read poetry less
then a hundred years to see how language
recreates meanings its sculpting to me
i dont follow convention make it up as
I go along letting the mere power of the
word stand out in a way without the
selling of all the rest of the prompts
literaly bartering an understanding with
the reader
its all poetry in the end
thank You Longo
weirdelf
10 years 6 months ago
I love that concept!
Bartering an understanding with the reader.
Love the poem but consider your reply to be the more significant work!
Geremia
10 years 6 months ago
Poetry, Steven, comes from
Poetry, Steven, comes from many sources, but few can manipulate the word and give it another reality n a special context. That is creativity, You have that ability.
joe
Esker
10 years 6 months ago
This is the ramblings of a madman
staring too long at the sun?
You are right Jess the comment feilds
are what makes this place and poems
come into some kind of meaning.
I dont remember this work
a lot of the times Im pretty out
there...sleep deprived under
a lot of stress..
its good though because the more
i work to get my poetry legible to the
mind the more in real life I can
speak and people understand
Give it another reality
Thanks for the compliment!
I work hard at the mix
words can have
Thank You!