Rosewood Apothecary

Jul 10, 2022 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Moon Salve

I’ve been to places
few have seen them
Physical and ethereal

They both require
Selfless review
With knowledge of which of the two is surreal

Summiting mountains
Only a few
But countless traverses of trail

Loads of challenges
Victories too
And numerous trials and tests that were failed

I Pick myself up
Dust my back off
Massage magic salve on the wounds

I fashion resolve
Into a crutch
Relentlessly drawn to your beckoning moon

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Something for my wife, who carries me sometimes.

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: U.S.A., USA

Favorite Poets: Emily Dickinson, Robert Frost, Walt Whitman. I’m enamored by the work of lyricists such as Robert Hunter, John Barlow, John Dyer Baizley, and Tom Marshall just to name a handful.

Comments

Candlewitch

3 years ago

dear Tim,

I really like these lines:

I fashion resolve
Into a crutch
Relentlessly drawn to your beckoning moon

I think they are the heart of this piece. i am in love with the moon, too. i think Cancer is my "moon sign"
I really like your title it just reaches out and grabbed me! i also like how the poem is structured, a thing of beauty!

*hugs, Cat

Rosewood Apothecary

3 years ago

Gratitude

Always pleased to hear you enjoy my writing. The feeling is mutual I assure you. I really love that one for Steve from yesterday.

Thanks friend,
Tim

Candlewitch

3 years ago

thank you

Tim you are both gracious and kind.

*warm hugs, Cat

Ray Whitaker

3 years ago

Nice piece!

The quest, your poem speaks to that (to me). I mean the quest walking the trail of enlightenment.

RoseBlack

3 years ago

Love the feeling

Of this poem. Reminds me of astral projection and surfing the realms beyond consciousness. Such adventures and journeys await when we leave ourselves and push beyond the present. A light, pleasant read for sure.

Geezer

3 years ago

This has...

an etheral quality about it, that is hard to define. I love that you honor your wife with it. I get the part where:
"Summiting mountains
Only a few
But countless traverses of trail
~ Geez.
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