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Cloudthings
Cloudthings
Apr 26, 2012 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Moonlit reflections

Inside the pearly embrace of nature’s spotlight
Warmed and soothed by time
At peace at last I stand in moonlight
Emptied beautifully by the moment only
How the healing eased the ache
The searing, sucking legacy of that deceiver
I know now the gift that was his heartless disregard
To free me up for this deserving heart and potency
Where I once craved and suffered in such unfulfilled desire
I glance behind, mere memory that fades each season
And nestle free of tethered thrashing disappointed hope
Into comfort, safe consistency as I had never known
A love to trust and to rely on
Foundation firm and flexible,
since it is the strength
and very truth between us
Gladly I reflect and turn away
From such yearning yesterday

About This Poem

Last Few Words: I guess it's Prose, hopefully poetic prose... Is it less valid as a poem though? In the thick of the workshop, now I am confused... perhaps I liked my comfy lack of clarity of the distinction. I'm sure I'll get comfy again!

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Australia, regional Victoria, AUS

Favorite Poets: So many... Rumi, Spike Milligan, Keats. Many of the Neopoet clan, past & present. A myriad of song writers, Dylan, Jackson Browne, Lior, & I must add the poetic influence of painters, sculptors & creators across the world... Life really, especially the sky.

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Comments

Rula

Rula

13 years 2 months ago

No better shelter

What better shelter would anyone seek
than a the moon and its reflecton
where we would empty our ach
and give the heart its satisfaction

Your words are really beautiful and inspiring
Keep it up!!

judyanne

judyanne

13 years 2 months ago

hi anni

i like this
some lines seem a little long to my ear, with words that seem superfluous and (imho i stress) detract from the emotive essence of the write

and
'Emptied beautifully by the moment only' - lol - can you think of another word to replace 'beautifully' ??

i love the final lines
'Gladly I reflect and turn away
From such yearning yesterday' - but perhaps this needs an 'of'?
- 'From such yearning of yesterday' ??

love judy
xxx