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Morning Covenant
I don't like calendars.
The constant march of weeks and months,
tracking them methodically as we go.
Fewer days for us to live.
This morning, I awake
and brush these thoughts aside.
The light through the drapes makes no promises,
but beckons me to rise
and welcome the tiny Pacific Wrens
often seen through our window.
I check the orange tree through the glass
to see if some have ripened enough
for our morning table.
The crescendo of little wonders
just within my view begins again.
This was the promise after all.
About This Poem
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
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How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
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Comments
Steamboat_Denny
6 months 4 weeks ago
This is great
As somebody who actually enjoys calendars it's interesting to see the perspective of somebody who doesn't. I love the detail of the Pacific Wrens, I'm also an avid bird watcher. I love the title, it's eye catching but vague enough to not reveal what the poem is actually about.
Michael Anthony
6 months 3 weeks ago
Thank you Denny! Calendars do
Thank you Denny! Calendars do serve their purpose, so I'll give them that. Appreciate your thoughts on this piece.
Best!