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Jokerface82
Jokerface82
Apr 07, 2025 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)
This poem is part of the challenge:

04/25 The shape of a shadow

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Morning Shadow

I stood on the Wonderland
green fields, as my body
developed spilled shadows

From a dazzling fireball
shackled in the spread
of the brochure blue sky.
My shape, chocking up
the morning sun, and the
wing chorus filling my
ear drums.

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Region, Country: Uk, GBR

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neopoet

neopoet

2 months 2 weeks ago

Neopoet AI - version 2.0

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The imagery in your poem "Morning Shadow" is vivid and evocative, creating a strong sense of place and atmosphere. The contrast between the bright morning sun and the shadows it casts is effectively portrayed, adding depth to the scene. Consider exploring the theme of contrast further to enhance the impact of your poem. Additionally, paying attention to the flow and structure of your lines could help improve the overall coherence and impact of your work.

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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

2 months 2 weeks ago

Hello Jokerface!

I like your poem... this is my favorite line:

"of the brochure blue sky."

hugs, Cat