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The Morrigan

I met her once,
in a battered place
where Irish bombs blew
holes into an English city,
broken bodies writhing
as I looked down at the splinters
of a shattered friend
stuck deep into my shins.

I looked up dazed,
uncomprehending
of the nearing laughter
ringing in my ears,
blood dripping in my eyes,
and I could see her
as she crossed smashed chaos
of the cratered street,
lissome nakedness
stalking effortless
sword held idly in hand
through the blood and madness,
her ravens following,
fluttering from corpse to corpse.

As pale as white-capped
winter waves,
as dark as earth's occluding shadow
covering the moon,
icy cold despite the summer day,
effortless, she strolled
through smoking ruin
until she paused in her smooth
lope of striding
just where the twisted wreckage
of what used to be a car
still burned,
and gave to me a grin of such ferocious
joy and satisfaction
that I trembled with the surety
of my own approaching death
until she laughed,
and shook her head.

I have seen her sometimes since,
poisoning my television,
sometimes in a pale glimpse
of predatory shadow
through a war-zone jungle,
or a long-limbed figure leaning pale
from behind a shattered tank
or burning building,
but in all the violence pouring
from the screen what I see
most usually
is the joyful madness in her eyes,
the certainty that she
will always be
our welcomed avatar
of death, and war.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Something I did for a contest, while Neopoet was away.

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Not actively editing

About the Author

Region, Country: Earth Vicinity (within a five light-year radius), ZZC

Favorite Poets: John Donne, T.S. Eliot, Serendipity, Emily Dickenson, Kailashana, Charles Bukowski, Kabir, Rett, Dalton, W. B. Yeats, William Blake, Rainer Maria Rilke, and many other Neopoet poets; Neopoet has heavily influenced my poetry and my ability to write it well.

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Comments

judyanne

judyanne

14 years 8 months ago

powerful awesome breath-taking

the accolades don't describe it jim

'as I looked down at the splinters
of a shattered friend
stuck deep into my shins.'
- oh my, what descriptive from start to finish
- it is times like this i'd like to see spotlight back

word usage and clipped pacing perfect in maintaining the feeling of horror and alieness of the Morrigan
i have nothing at all to crit.
i just bow

love judy
xxxx

themoonman

themoonman

14 years 8 months ago

The Morrigan ...

Hi Jim,
This was a joy to read, exciting and great descriptions
used ... the one thing I saw was perhaps not so important,
but you used "effortless" twice, not that it's a no no, but
the second use of it was impelling, but I felt needed a comma
to empower the word.
Did you win the contest?
Great ending by the way!

Richard

Race_9togo

Race_9togo

14 years 8 months ago

Hi Richard,

I am very glad that you enjoyed this so.
Yes, I see what you mean, and I have made the change.
No, but I got an honorable mention, lol. I entered it into another one as well, so we will see.

Thanks, as always, for your criticism, you know how important it is to me.

Victorclaude

Victorclaude

14 years 8 months ago

Oh, my~!

Oh, my~!

Jim,

Very well done, but just from a personal point of view, I wish the morrigan would take a permanent vacation, and the gods of war as well. No stranger to war myself -- three years in the Nam -- I probably ran into this apparition more than once.

I wonder if this kind of nonsense will ever end?

Victor

Race_9togo

Race_9togo

14 years 8 months ago

Victor,

Thank you much for you comment.
You are a combat veteran, in Nam for three years? Then you've met her, and my sympathy to you, for that meeting is always nasty, to say the least.
Yes, I agree with you, I hope that we can retire this particular goddess, and her fellow war-mongers, in short order. I think we ultimately will - that's the eternal optimist in me - but not in our lifetimes, I'm afraid.
But I for one will keep trying.
:)
Thanks again Victor, always a pleasure to read your comments.

Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

14 years 8 months ago

it makes one shudder

Fascinating and exotically colourful, dripping,
cloaked, fluttering black ravens and all, it makes
one shudder and yet it is exhilarating too, this is
terrific Jim. Very nice.
LuvAnn.

Race_9togo

Race_9togo

14 years 8 months ago

Anne

Yes, she is exhilarating - that's the real horror of The Morrigan; you know how foul she is, how horrible her presense is, but you cannot help but be eager for that presense, it is the drug of war and violence.
Thank you, for your kind comment.

D

Dalton

14 years 8 months ago

Great piece

Great piece and its wonderdful to see someone writing about her again atlast. If this system permitted awarding stars you'd get five. Thanks for sharing, John

Race_9togo

Race_9togo

14 years 8 months ago

John

Thanks man. Yes, it is good to see someone writing about her - and I see you dealt so beautifully with her slow demise. I think there are not many of us who still understand or even remember her...so I'm glad to read the poetry of one who still does.