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Emina Smajevic
Nov 22, 2013 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Mosquitoes in the night !

THEY

Maybe the angels
Saw the light
Like mosquitoes in the night
Bulb turned on
In my room

So they hurry through opened window to me!

And I'm telling them

-There's no life in here for you,
you're going to die.

I

I'm peeking through keyhole!
There's me in an empty room

It's summer night
Just to let you know

If I open the window
Mosquitoes will enter

This way
Completely is enough for me

I see the sky
So high
Full moon
Shines!

About This Poem

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Country/Region: Sarajevo Bosnia&Herzegovina

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Emina Smajevic

11 years 7 months ago

no Beau it means something

no Beau it means something like I wouldn't like to change this way, I like this way

you know those bugs that light in the dark I thing they're so cute
and this poem is imagism cause I'm kinda obsessed with Williams, it has a very deep meaning
when I say angels I thing of them like less worth than myself (human) although they are beautiful..the first part of the poem is about them and the second one is about me (how I'm not prepared to be human although I am)

so great to have you here too
so good I've found neopoet
;)

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scribbler

11 years 7 months ago

hi

I don't know if it is intentional but the form and structure of this poem mirrors the irritation caused by the banes of summer lol. I think you might do a better job tying in the last stanza with the rest of the poem but that might just be me.............stan

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Emina Smajevic

11 years 7 months ago

maybe you're right stan,

maybe you're right stan, maybe that might be just you, maybe just me ..who knows :D
I might do a better job but worse is always possible
anyway, I'm gonna think about it
thx
;)