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Apr 16, 2025
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A Mother's Love
My Mother had a gentle touch, a whispered word, her love had warmth, a feeling unheard.
My Mother worked hard every day and taught me exciting new things with her acts of sacrifice she knew was unique for me to learn.
My Mother is the most distinctive person in my life, she listens to my problems and cares for my hurts, and is so kind and loving with her unending patience.
She was my cherished friend and my forever inspiration.
She gave me strength to fight so I can be the shining light in her life. I will become the Mother to my children,she would be proud of.
The Love a Mother has dwells deep inside her soul.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Any critism would be helpful.
Review Request Direction: How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
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neopoet
2 months 1 week ago
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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "A Mother's Love" beautifully captures the essence of a mother's love and the profound impact it has on a person's life. The imagery of a mother's gentle touch, whispered words, and acts of sacrifice effectively conveys the warmth and selflessness associated with maternal love. The poem also highlights the role of a mother as a listener, a caregiver, and an inspiration, which are all key aspects of the mother-child relationship.
One suggestion for improvement would be to consider varying the structure of the poem to create more rhythm and flow. This could involve experimenting with different line lengths or incorporating poetic devices such as rhyme or meter to enhance the overall musicality of the piece. Additionally, you may want to explore different ways to evoke emotions through vivid descriptions or sensory details to further engage the reader.
Overall, "A Mother's Love" is a heartfelt tribute to the special bond between a mother and child. By refining the structure and exploring more nuanced ways to convey emotions, you can further elevate
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Rula
2 months 1 week ago
Hello Mary
Nice to meet you.
Reading this one I think you've got a universal theme to which many could relate.
I'm not sure if you agree with me that this one reads more like prose. If you aim for a poem it can easily be done by shortening the lines and adding some internal and/or ending ones.
Of course this us only an opinion. You know better what you want.
Thank you for sharing.
Mary Derringer
2 months 1 week ago
RulA
Nice to meet you, Rula. I am tryingvery hard to get a flow for my poems.
Thanks for your comment.