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Mountains That Move
At first glance the ground shivers
the trees sway and lift with ease
the seas align with the pattern of the sun
and to know -
true gifts are given in revelations
among the hopeless there's a man
sitting with bars and rails
and thus he goes -
attempting to change the pulse of the ground
to exchange negotiations with man
so the thoughts can prevail with vengeance
and thy mighty hands can protrude through
to ask - 'can mountains be moved'
believe the tale of lions and wolves
give heart and take strain -
no vast level is possible beyond air
About This Poem
Review Request Direction:
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
Is the internal logic consistent?
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Comments
The Poetry Dude
4 years 8 months ago
Thank you for the comment
Thank you for the comment Teddy. And yes, it is ok to use initials. :)
Ray Whitaker
4 years 8 months ago
Welcome to the site!
Looking forward to reading more of your work.
The Poetry Dude
4 years 8 months ago
Hey Ray
Thank you. I am eager to post more.