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Mousing

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The neighbors are fucking again.          
One slab of meat slapping off the other:          
greedy, porcine. He grunts, she grunts.        
         
My cigarette heats a fingernail      
bringing me back to my own frigid hands.   
I ping it far enough to land in their garden.        
         
She squeals; her Polish is music. I wonder  
if she sounds like that when he's out of her.  
I see my empty bed and my eyes fall  
cuntwards.        

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About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Not actively editing

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Country/Region: GBR

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Race_9togo

Race_9togo

11 years 2 months ago

Hello Violet,

I have no criticism of this. Just appreciation, and some envy, its so good.

violet

violet

11 years 2 months ago

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Thank you so much, Jim, for passing through. It's appreciated!

R

raj

11 years 2 months ago

Violet

Raw emotions and feelings expressed without mincing words.

Regards,

violet

violet

11 years 2 months ago

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Thank you, Raj. Glad you came by.

themoonman

themoonman

11 years 2 months ago

Violet,

Reality is such a harsh thing but in poetry
is really quite beautiful,

thanks for sharing this slice with us.

Richard

violet

violet

11 years 1 month ago

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Ahh, yes. Reality is a bit of an enemy at times. And that cigarette was the best weapon I had at that moment ;)

Ian.T

Ian.T

11 years 1 month ago

Violet

A good visual of someone that is alone, where just the heat of a cigarette brings back reality,
Yours Ian.T