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Mr Santa and Mrs.Clause pub crawls
Glasses clinking and pinging ,
jolly voices singing, sprightfully
fattening the pub with bursts
of festive energy. A flamboyant
flashy jukebox, poured out back
slapping themes.
Overbrimming pints, and
Sparkling wine, froth spilling
on gummy surfaces and
garments.
Migits filled with shots
dressed as elves in tree
green
gyrating on burgundy
sticky stools.
Santa's spilled belly
Perched. His winter blue
eyes sat glossy, his nose
coated in brandy, knocking
back glinting golden larger
heartwarming his
his liver .
Mrs clause table dancing filling
her hour glass body and money
throwing thighs. Hot tube top struggling
to hold back her creamy globes from
spilling.
Beautiful red hair, and eyes
that held a composite of quartz
greens. And a...
curtain of red fire that bounced
around her shoulders as she stumbled
to the bar holding her heels to fill up another .
About This Poem
Review Request Direction:
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
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Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
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6 months 3 weeks ago
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Leslie
6 months 3 weeks ago
Jokerface82
I thought this unusual in theme for you. Your vocab still superior in all aspects. What a great festive holiday write!
Jokerface82
6 months 3 weeks ago
Thank you
It was a fun one to do haha!