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Jul 28, 2022
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Murder Me Not (Round Robin Part 1)
A sliver of silver through the sheers,
faint breeze tickling my nose
dream sequence abandoning me
as the nightmare begins to unfold
I didn't hear him coming
feet that never made a sound
all I remember is his hot breath upon my neck
callous fingers that took hold
claw marks decorated his face, dripping all my rage
through bloody eyes, it was hard for him to see
what i pulled out from under my pillow
what could it be
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Here is my attempt at beginning a Round Robin :) Enjoy!
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Rosewood Apothecary
2 years 11 months ago
Alright
That ought to do. You left a perfectly answerable question. I think this goes to Mark?
RoseBlack
2 years 11 months ago
Figured a good pick up point
Leaves room for creativity and to flip the script if need be
Rosewood Apothecary
2 years 11 months ago
Are we even conscious
That is the question…
RoseBlack
2 years 11 months ago
I don't know
Are we?
RoseBlack
2 years 11 months ago
I can't wait to see
What it is!!! I'm on the edge of my seat
RoseBlack
2 years 11 months ago
The hose
Was a good surprise! A step away from our traditional methods of murder! You did great.
Candlewitch
2 years 11 months ago
dear RB,
what you have here is a very good start! I love the suspenseful footprints you have left for Mark to follow. I hope I can do as well. am I after Mark?
always, Cat
ever, eddy
RoseBlack
2 years 11 months ago
Hi Cat
I am not sure whose next. May need to check with Gee?
Candlewitch
2 years 11 months ago
I just
sent him a p.m. I'm nervous...
*hugs, Cat
Candlewitch
2 years 11 months ago
I submitted mine...
this morning. so...is it back to Geezer or does he start a new one?
Candlewitch
2 years 11 months ago
dear Mark,
that's ok with me. I don't think we have a deadline.
*hugs, Cat
Rosewood Apothecary
2 years 11 months ago
I’m waiting on Geezer
He’s next then I finish was the plan. Mark starts next round