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Murder Me Not (Round Robin Part 1)

A sliver of silver through the sheers,
faint breeze tickling my nose
dream sequence abandoning me
as the nightmare begins to unfold
I didn't hear him coming
feet that never made a sound
all I remember is his hot breath upon my neck
callous fingers that took hold
claw marks decorated his face, dripping all my rage
through bloody eyes, it was hard for him to see
what i pulled out from under my pillow
what could it be

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Here is my attempt at beginning a Round Robin :) Enjoy!

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Country/Region: United States

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe, Jim Morrison

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Rosewood Apothecary

Rosewood Apothecary

2 years 11 months ago

Alright

That ought to do. You left a perfectly answerable question. I think this goes to Mark?

RoseBlack

RoseBlack

2 years 11 months ago

The hose

Was a good surprise! A step away from our traditional methods of murder! You did great.

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

2 years 11 months ago

dear RB,

what you have here is a very good start! I love the suspenseful footprints you have left for Mark to follow. I hope I can do as well. am I after Mark?

always, Cat
ever, eddy

RoseBlack

RoseBlack

2 years 11 months ago

Hi Cat

I am not sure whose next. May need to check with Gee?

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

2 years 11 months ago

dear Mark,

that's ok with me. I don't think we have a deadline.

*hugs, Cat