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Music...
Came into my life
and never left.
It just evolved
in many different forms.
At first
as part of a group
with the joining of voices.
With songs from
times I remember
and times I don't.
And then
with music
classical in nature
or even
with classical lines imposed.
And now
it's swing
but at the very roots of swing.
I'm in the deep end now.
Truly deep.
The people I meet
are amazing.
Violin players
some from orchestras,
some just so talented.
Piano accordians
abound in
one of the music groups.
On the wall
photos from
my mother's past life.
The names and faces
of her mentors.
Ghosts
from a life
I only heard
stories about.
Music
is saving me
and has saved me
from spiraling downwards.
It focuses
my mind
and my soul.
It is an education
which is evolving.
It is a pleasurable
experience.
Music
entered my life
in 2024,
along with Bruce.
Two life-changing
experiences for me.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: After Shaya died, the one thing I was certain of, was that music would be there in my life. At that time, it was my CD collection for the community radio show. Then, at a multicultural music festival, I stood entranced at the sound of the choir. I resolved to join a choir, and instead, ended up in two of them. Great decision. At the very same music festival, twelve months later, I joined a music school. I am getting there very slowly, developing my ear for music and learning to use it better. In essence, music , apart from the hypnotherapy session in 2024, has healed me and is healing me, even as I write this entry.
Review Request Direction:
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
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neopoet
4 months 2 weeks ago
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Geezer
4 months 2 weeks ago
I enjoy...
your narrative style, it takes one to a reality, that is really a story about a person's never-ending journey of self-exploration.
I wish you well on that journey. ~ Geezer.
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The Gogetter
4 months 1 week ago
I always like your responses
I like to think that I am telling a story with my poems, so that they become a cross between a journal in free form style and a narrative style of poetry. I was attempting, with this poem, to explain exactly the reason why music has played such an enormous part in my life, in ways which even surprises me. I never thought that it would be so significant in my life. It has become the most important thing for me. It was only two days ago, when I was in a hall, with those photos, that I discovered the connection between the stories my mother told me and the musical style I was involved in. I also now understand that there was always an ability for me to write poetry, but I was only watching Sarah write poems, thinking and admiring her skills when she was very young. I had to wait until my husband died to discover that particular skill. The best part of the journey you so rightly have picked up on in your comments, is that I began most of my poetry in absolute agony , and now I am starting to see a small lift in my mood, especially since that session with Bruce. The poems are revealing more about the improvement and the progress I have made in that way. I am up to A4 book number seven of poems.