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Nov 24, 2022
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Music Under New Moon (Inspired by ‘Memory of You’ by Lavender)
My sleep being deep and brief
Waking to the new moon sky
Out under the stars I step
Time suspended in my eye
A shining perfect orchestration
Singing down from up above
Performing double brightly
Songs of universal love
These questions with half answers
Become a lavender sunrise
The stars have reached crescendo
They’re saying their goodbyes
They leave, and leave me thankful
On this and every single day
Grateful is a habit now
Love will always find a way
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Whoa! That was intense. I love you all.
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - draft
Comments
Lavender
2 years 7 months ago
Music Under New Moon
Hi, Tim,
I can feel your energy in this piece! Gratitude! So wonderful to experience the simplicity and the mystery of the autumn sky. My favorite lines: "The stars have reached crescendo, They're saying their goodbyes..." What a performance! Beautiful poetry.
Peace and love to you on this Thanksgiving Day.
L
RoseBlack
2 years 7 months ago
Beautifully written
I really adore all your nature based poetry. There is a certain tenderness and like Lavender said, simplicity that is calming and refreshing. Just pleasant to read. Your use of language and rhyme rolls in harmony while being read. Great job!