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Mustangs
All I want is mustangs
to break and ride all day,
for I know that mustangs will
take my pain away.
Riding with the wild till
the sun goes down.
Sleeping with my mustangs
on the warm August ground.
My mustangs will change my whole mood
you keep laughing but you will
see that it's true.
You want to see me happy a smile
on my face just give me a mustang,
saddle and some reins.
Don't worry about me
I'll be back some day just give
sometime to run with the stangs.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
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Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
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Heather Perry
2 years 5 months ago
Thank you
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