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Mutations of Living Ones is Evolution

Mutations of Living Ones is Evolution

....nothing else is ordained for bacteria like agents
but mutate day in day out
with folks different
their cultures must become inherent
in mutations followed by another one

life's ways are multi
not a single one
but evolution is the only alternate
to any existence

we today's products become sub and system of another
if I may add
experienced or intelligent generation
repeating the same pattern of act
for millennia to come

believe me not
how can anyone I force
most have diffused brains
fuses burnt

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: UNIVERSE...ETERNITY C/O ME, ROU

Favorite Poets: All across the Internet whom I read , and they inspire..

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Geezer

Geezer

4 years 1 month ago

Pretty rough...

I think you should refine this by re-writing the lines of:
"[and] evolution is the alternate...

"We become sub and system of the others"

Delete [If I may add] it adds nothing to the line before or after it.

"Experienced and intelligent generations
repeating the same pattern for millennia to come."

"how can I force anyone?"
~ Geez.
.

lovedly

lovedly

4 years 1 month ago

ok Gee

shall do
as I evolve to satisfy you
my mentor

lovedly

lovedly

4 years 1 month ago

Thanks Ray

shall look into it having compy probs since morning
sorry