raj

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Mute Question (Tanka Couplet)

How did they make love
which seed did make her conceive
was it truly fruit

the fruit could sate her hunger
not the one which makes a child

it is a story
moms and dads make us believe
to put us to sleep

while Eve did eat an apple
did Adam pick her cherry?

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Eastern

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Somewhere in the world, IND

Comments

Candlewitch

4 years 10 months ago

Wow!

great questions! the end caught me by surprise and I LOL'd

*hug, Cat
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raj

4 years 10 months ago

Hi dear Cat

thanks for your visit ..it was in response to Teddy urging me to write about Adam and Eve...so i tried...

hugs...

Candlewitch

4 years 10 months ago

ya done great...I loved it!

*hug, Cat
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raj

4 years 10 months ago

Hi again Cat

thanks for re visiting and your comment...:)

hugs...

Geezer

4 years 10 months ago

Surprise, surprise...

I was caught by surprise as much as Cat was! Funny that! LMAO. ~ Geez.
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raj

4 years 10 months ago

Hi Geezer

thank for your time....good to know you liked it and it made you LMAO :)

raj

4 years 10 months ago

Hi Teddy

you wanted me to do write something on Adam and Eve...so i tried to...good to know you liked it ...found it though provoking and loved the ending...

thanks...

jetz

4 years 10 months ago

haaaaa, Raj,

you devil you.

raj

4 years 10 months ago

Hi Jetz...

thanks for your visit...i take being called a "devil" in a good way :) good to know it made you laugh...

be well...