Neopoem Of The Week February 5th to February 11th 2023

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My Bloody Valentine

Take this burnt rose from upon your lips
The thorns will only hurt a bit
Crimson regrets disembogue
As your color dips

Take this knife from out your chest
Twist the edge like your spoken word
Wounds may heal with proper care
But verbal evidence lingers in the air

Take this kiss upon your last breath
My name in your mouth for eternal rest
Your favorite flavor at best
I'll love you forever, my bloody Valentine

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: United States

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe, Jim Morrison

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Comments

Geezer

2 years 4 months ago

Oooooh...

this reads like the beginning of a "Killer" poem! He wants, no, needs, one of these lines for himself! We love it! ~ Geez.
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RoseBlack

2 years 4 months ago

I am so glad

Killer approves. He understands Valentine's Day is my least favorite holiday!

Candlewitch

2 years 4 months ago

dear Carrie,

a little blood, no...scratch that, make it a lot of blood on V-Day is expected, at least in my book. one of the worst days in the book of holidays! your poem is in stages of brutality... I Love it!

*ever eddy
* hugs, Cat

RoseBlack

2 years 4 months ago

Thank you Cat

I thought you might like this! Something about the whole necrotic erotic death of my Valentine....

Rosewood Apothecary

2 years 4 months ago

There she is

Now this is Rose Black. You know how I feel about when you murder people. I do believe you’re about as strong a poet at dark poetry as we have here, maybe Eddy Styx.

Well done,
Tim