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Neopoet Random Challenges #19

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My Conversation With A Famous Poet.

When I started the journey
It seemed like an endless journey
When I took an endless path
I carved out ways and minds,

The way was deep and the weather too was sharp
When I was flying like a soaring kite
On a pregnant cloud,

I shouted a song in exile
Calling the marauding beasts to a fight
When it seemed like it all ended,

In my sober
I was called to a dance
I cried and folded my arms
As I hung my harp on the willow tree
I cried to fight to live
But I was always uneasy
When they talked of dry bones,

Alone fight is a long war
Endless and soundless like the wave of the oceans
When people heard it, their hearts fainted
They thought it was a rhyme.

This is the endless journey
Here we stand, Soyinka.

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: How was my language use?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Osun State, Nigeria, NGA

Favorite Poets: William Wordsworth, Niyi Osundare, Wole Soyinka, J.P Clack

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Geezer

Geezer

2 years 10 months ago

An excellent...

piece! Only a couple of things I'd like to point out. One, you used the wrong past tense of hang; it should be [hung], two, what is a [wallow tree]? Do you mean willow tree? Thirdly, I am not familiar with the poet you speak of, Soyinka; so, I looked him up. Your language is good, the theme is excellent and it flowed logically from beginning to end. Nice job, very well done! ~ Geezer .
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