Lavender

May 22, 2023 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

My Cup Runneth Over

It happened
when you

flowed into
my world and

whispered
"I do."

A porcelain
vessel

became the
boundless sea.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: United States

Favorite Poets: I tend to read Ted Kooser, Jim Harrison, Billy Collins, Paul Simon, Robert Frost. I like minimalist poetry, and poems reflecting on nature and Mother Earth.

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Comments

neopoet

2 years 1 month ago

Neopoet AI (premium)

The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

This poem, titled "My Cup Runneth Over," is a brief but powerful exploration of the transformative power of love. The speaker describes the moment when their beloved entered their life and made it infinitely richer - simply by saying "I do." The metaphor of a porcelain vessel becoming a boundless sea is striking, emphasizing how love can expand our world beyond what we ever thought possible.

One possible line edit to consider would be changing "flowed into" to "walked into," as the latter may more clearly evoke the image of the beloved entering the speaker's life.

Overall, "My Cup Runneth Over" is a beautifully concise and evocative poem that captures the profound impact of love on the human heart.

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Lavender

2 years 1 month ago

Thank you!

I will consider the suggestion of "walked" - though I wanted the image to bring something that would enhance "runneth over."
Thanks again!
L

Geezer

2 years 1 month ago

I agree...

you should keep the "runneth over" Geez.
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Lavender

2 years 1 month ago

Hello, Geezer,

I definitely want to keep the sense of flowing.
Thank you so much!
L

Ruby Lord

2 years 1 month ago

Oooh that's so good, your

Oooh that's so good, your imagery is laid out like an oil painting. Well done, loved it. Ruby :)

Lavender

2 years 1 month ago

Hello, Ruby,

You are very kind. I appreciate your warm comments!
Thank you,
L

Candlewitch

2 years 1 month ago

dear Lavender,

I really love this style of poetry you have crafted...it is yours. beautiful!

(I have been away for awhile due to illness) this is the first poem I have read since coming back, and I feel uplifted by it!

*love, Cat

Lavender

2 years 1 month ago

Hello, Cat,

I've noticed you've been absent. I'm so sorry you haven't been feeling ill. I hope that you are well now! Thank you for reading and commenting. I always appreciate your thoughts!
L

Seren

2 years 1 month ago

Dear L

This is art in word. Absolutely gorgeous. It's s real gift to be able to say so much with so little

Sigh I've missed your poetry. Along with everyone else of course with time I'll catch up.

Love & hugs

J xxx

Lavender

2 years 1 month ago

Hello, Dear Jayne!

Love that you are back! Thank you for reading and I look forward to reading more from you.Take good care of your wonderful self. :)
Much love,
Lx