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Jan 19, 2025
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My Essence
My essence,
My soul,
Needs a lot of food
In order to be fed
And nourished.
My diet
Is rich
And varied.
Depending on the way I feel,
It is either
Complex
Or simple.
Sometimes
My soul's requirements
Are aesoteric,
With the use of words
And narratives.
This diet
Is harder to describe.
It can be a poem
Like this one
Or an entry
In my journal.
Thus clearing my mind,
Onto the page in my
Notebook.
Words are very powerful
For me.
They drive me,
And my brain
Like a car
Needs fuel
To move forward.
While this soul
Inhabits my body
I tend to it
Very carefully
As I would
A plant in my garden.
With love
And tenderness.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: I was thinking about what moved me to create and write. The soul, my soul, is inside of me. My body houses it, but I must feed the mind in order for the soul to be complete.It is my essential feature, my essence.Without it I am not me, the Gogetter.
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
neopoet
5 months 3 weeks ago
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "My Essence" explores the idea of nourishing the soul through various means, such as food, words, and writing. The metaphor of feeding the soul like a plant in a garden is vivid and effective in conveying the care and attention the speaker gives to their inner self. The use of imagery, such as comparing words to fuel for the brain and the soul's requirements to a varied diet, adds depth to the poem.
One suggestion for improvement would be to consider varying the structure and rhythm of the poem to create more impact and engagement. Experimenting with different line lengths, stanza breaks, or rhyme schemes could enhance the overall flow and musicality of the piece. Additionally, exploring different poetic devices, such as metaphors, similes, or symbolism, could further enrich the imagery and thematic depth of the poem.
Overall, "My Essence" offers a thoughtful reflection on the importance of nurturing the soul through nourishment and care. By refining the structure and incorporating more poetic devices, the poem
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Geezer
5 months 3 weeks ago
Your essence...
has a varied diet indeed! The only thing i see here, is the need for a comma or two. The idea is sound, the form is okay, and there is no need for further explanation. Geez.
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The Gogetter
5 months 3 weeks ago
Gratitude to you Geezer
Thank you Geezer. I enjoy being in a good mood. I can still write poems, even when I am happy. This is good.