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Nov 08, 2022
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This poem is part of the contest:
Neopoem Of The Week Contest November 6th to November 12th 2022
My Friend (My Love)
I love you, much like a semicolon-
with an intentional point (and a bashful smile)
The one I can not use
The moon I see
(a rising pale-flagged truce)
You
Use the semicolon,
To show us we (once alone)
Are now held tightly sewn,
Together
As our memories are fond-
And forego the breaking
Depth of the black and blue,
and a new swell taking
My pause of intention
for the moment in question
the moon smiles to mention,
In love ; we love
A love I make for you
My semicolon (baby)
I will always-
hold you
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Geezer
2 years 7 months ago
I do believe...
that the word is semicolon. A semi column, would be a half a column, which wouldn't hold up anything that a column would. The poem would be rather unique if you had used semicolon, because I can understand the intentional point and bashful smile.
~ Geezer.
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Killer Bee
2 years 7 months ago
Ahhh
Right you are! I often muck these two around, and have made the correction now. Neopoet showing itself useful once again. Thank you.
Jackweb
2 years 7 months ago
Nice one!
I am a sucker for a love poem. This is a bold profession of such laden with excellent metaphors.
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