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Geezer
Geezer
Jan 03, 2025 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)
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My Junk Drawers...

I've got a desk behind the door,
with drawers of junk I find,
I've got all types of nails, and more,
I've got screws of every kind.

My junk drawers... yeah, it's three,
have stuff to fix anything,
you just have to look and see,
if you need a special spring.

There's nuts and bolts, wire too,
some chain and string, I think.
I'll find something I can use,
some glue here; sure does stink.

I know whatever's here, someplace...
hiding in plain sight, I'll bet.
Right before my eyes and face.
Damn! I just don't see it yet.

Dead batteries or broken parts,
arms that bend wrong way.
Love that's scratched on metal hearts,
a fold-up eating tray.

I might have to add one more,
to hold the overflow.
The drawers are full, heavy, sure
nowhere else for it to go.

So, I get to tell the nagging wife,
I've got one empty now,
She says she's glad, I've changed my life,
I wipe the sweat up from my brow.

Fooled again, she doesn't know,
and she never goes out there.
I won't tell, I can't let it go,
It's not junk, I swear!

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: New York State - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Poe, Emily Dickenson, Robert Frost, Shakespeare, and many of the poets here at Neopoet.

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neopoet

neopoet

5 months 3 weeks ago

Neopoet AI (premium) - 5-29-23 version

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "My Junk Drawers" is a narrative piece that uses everyday objects to convey a story and emotions. The poem is successful in creating a vivid image of the speaker's environment and feelings, but there are areas where it can be improved.

The rhythm of the poem is inconsistent, which can disrupt the flow for the reader. For example, the second and fourth lines of the first stanza have a different number of syllables, which creates a jarring effect. Consider revising the poem to have a consistent rhythm throughout.

The poem could also benefit from more varied language. The speaker uses the word "junk" multiple times, which can make the poem feel repetitive. Consider using synonyms or related words to add variety to the poem.

The poem's narrative could be clearer. The speaker's relationship with their wife is introduced late in the poem, which can be confusing for the reader. Consider introducing this relationship earlier in the poem to provide context for the speaker's actions.

Lastly, the poem's theme could be developed further. The speaker's attachment to their junk could be used to explore themes of hoarding, nostalgia, or the value of seemingly worthless objects. Consider expanding on these themes to give the poem more depth.

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Rula

Rula

5 months 3 weeks ago

Sir Gee

Whatever you have in those drawers, I bet every home should have in a way or another.
I hate those nuts and bolts. I have lots of them, but rarely find the right one when needed.
Whatever your junk drawer overflows with, I think they are cleaner than my 2024's junk drawer:)
Much enjoyed the reading!
Thank you for sharing.

Geezer

Geezer

5 months 3 weeks ago

Thank you, Rula...

Nah, as indicated in my poem, my drawers are a total mess. They used to have some semblance of order, but now, it's only a vague... Huh, I think there might be one somewhere in that direction. I think that there is some merit to our A.I.'s advice on the meter being a bit better. I felt it as I was rereading this morning. I will look at it later. As always, thanks for your read and comments. ~ Geez.
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Lavender

Lavender

5 months 3 weeks ago

My Junk Drawers...

Hello, Geezer,
A great subject! We all have one or two junk drawers. They kinda tell a story. Yours seems to be the typical style, after all, where should all those parts go? I really like that final line. A very fun read!
I agree with the meter reference and will visit again after your revisions.
Thank you!
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Geezer

Geezer

5 months 3 weeks ago

I'm hoping...

that I've fixed the problems with the meter. Thank you for your read and comments. ~ Geez.
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Lavender

Lavender

5 months 2 weeks ago

Hello, Geezer,

There may be a few other places to look over a bit more, but I like your revisions!
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Ruby Lord

Ruby Lord

5 months 3 weeks ago

I like this, it made me feel

I like this, it made me feel less inefficient as I have junk stuffed in more than 3 drawers around the house. We are after all only human, never throw anything away, it could become tomorrows antique ha ha. Ruby xxx :)

Geezer

Geezer

5 months 3 weeks ago

Yeah...

I have a tendency to make people feel more efficient. But I do fix things a lot of times with stuff from my junk drawers. Thanks for your read and comment. ~ Geez.
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Alex Tanner

Alex Tanner

5 months 2 weeks ago

Yes

The best place to keep things,you know they are in there somewhere. Hate it when the wife tidies, I can't find a damn thing. Alex

kowque

kowque

5 months 2 weeks ago

It's a trick

she tidies up so you will always need her to help you find things ;)

kowque

kowque

5 months 2 weeks ago

It's so hard

to give anything but praise for your work.

At this stage even I want to be in your junk drawer hehehehehe :)

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

4 months 3 weeks ago

hello Geezer,

It sounds like your junk drawer needs pliers and wire cutters added to the mix! much enjoyed this poem as it made me smile. Steven keeps his junk drawers all to himself, LOL!

xxx and hugs, Cat

Geezer

Geezer

4 months 3 weeks ago

Thanks for...

the read and comments. Yeah, I had fun writing it. Wendy just pitches a bitch when I say that I need more room for clothes or something. Most times, she is glad that I can come up with something to fix a thing with. xxx and hugs ~ Geez.
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kowque

kowque

4 months 2 weeks ago

Y'all need to do some spring cleaning

Hold on to trinkets that hold a place of value

Not flint that gathers dust.

Memories are souls

Also,it's fun to have fun with poetry......that was done well here

Geezer

Geezer

4 months 2 weeks ago

Thank you...

for the read and comments. Yes, I do write for fun, and I enjoy hearing from the people that read it. Glad you enjoyed this one. ~ Geezer.
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Geezer

Geezer

4 months 2 weeks ago

Thank you for...

reading and commenting. Yes, I have a bit of sarcastic humor to my writing at times, I guess that is one thing I am known for. ~ Geezer.
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ziggy

4 months ago

Hi

Hello there good to read your words, this sounds familiar to me with drawers in my garage when I built it during covid it was empty now full of stuff from no where lol, nice read

Geezer

Geezer

4 months ago

Thank you, ziggy...

for the read and comments. I'm glad that this has resonated with so many folks. I guess that we are mostly all alike in that respect, we tend to save things that are not quite used up or maybe could be used to repair something else to be useful again. ~ Geezer.
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