My Love For You

It envelopes me,
Thoughts through emotions,
emotions fulfilled in actions.

It enraptures me,
dazed through my thoughts,
thoughts expressed in gales of language.

It unfurls me,
the curls and turns in my soul,
soul bespeaks as the heart exhales.

It pulls me,
Along the path of denouement,
From me to you, this build up states.

It knows no colour,
It bears no wrong,
Yea, things still go wrong.

Love is my story,
It is what I say,
That's what I'll do.

I am for you my love,
Thou art my attention,
Thou are my poetry.

©Uchenna Ozoekwe
aka Bethany Blaze.

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: U.S.A.

Comments

raj

6 years 11 months ago

Hi Mike

the tribulations of being in love very well expressed in these verses...a rarely used word denouement fits well here...
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Mikeozams

6 years 11 months ago

Thanks

Thanks man especially for the emphasis.

lovedly

6 years 11 months ago

very few I know compose three lines poetry another composes cinq

cinquins ---- 5 liners extraordinary
we must all be creative
that's why I started
FREESTYLE
Since years fifty

'''I am for you my love,
Thou art my attention,
Thou are my poetry.'''''....... superbly excellent how lucky she is

Mikeozams

6 years 11 months ago

Thanks

I guess you are right. I will tweak it to be 'thoughts through emotions, emotions fulfilled in actions' It's actually my motivation behind the lines.
I appreciate your input.