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My Lucky Charmer

A whisper of wind, a sunlit, soft sway,
She moves through the world in her own gentle way.
No gilded cage, no tethered, tight string,
With her, I watch joy on unfettered wing.

Like a bird in the sky, she exists ever free,
A spirit untamed, for all eyes to see.
She dances with shadows, she laughs with the light,
And paints every moment in colors so bright.

A clover of four leaves, a wish on a star,
She's more than a symbol, she's near and she's far.
A warmth in the winter, a cool summer breeze,
She brings serendipity, puts my heart at ease.

The world spins and shifts, a tumultuous sea,
But her presence is anchor, stability.
Her smile, a bright beacon, a comforting gleam,
She's woven her magic into life's waking dream.

And when doubts cloud my vision, and shadows descend,
Her hand in my own, a true, loyal friend.
She's more than a charm, more than luck can impart,
She's the beat of my rhythm, the song of my heart.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: USA the bay state, United Kingdom, Australia, South Africa, Nigeria, Canada, Europe, USA

Favorite Poets: Dylon, George Harrison, Leonard Cohen, Jess, Rett, Black Mountain Gang

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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

3 months 1 week ago

Dear Mark,

I rather think that you are the charmer, with your amazing way with wordsmithing! I loved this. My favorite lines are:

And when doubts cloud my vision, and shadows descend,
Her hand in my own, a true, loyal friend.
She's more than a charm, more than luck can impart,
She's the beat of my rhythm, the song of my heart.

fondly, Cat

mark

mark

3 months 1 week ago

Why thank you

dearest Cat I can always count on you to make my day.
I will drop by soon,
Mark

Geezer

Geezer

3 months 1 week ago

For...

the most part, this poem is pretty good, bringing a view of your muse to our eyes. Only problem I see is the [serendipity] line.
Too many beats, which can be fixed by taking out the connecting word, [and]. Nice, light theme, to show your connection with your muse. ~ Geez.
.

mark

mark

3 months 1 week ago

I suppose Geez

I been told too much punctuation before it's a habit I need to get a handle on.
Mark