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My meditational sprayer

My Meditational Sprayer

Blood pressure
is not a disease

When I went for my medicals
a doc said
‘‘No air travel''
but I insisted
whether or not
I would

He gave me ten tablets
asked me to buy more
if I survived the flight

That was only 5 years
down memory lane
and
I did not from medicine gain
I abandoned

PART SECOND

It's more
that we must reduce
our loneliness
our isolation
superficial stress
forced darkness
abstention

I have a lady friend taking
BP medicine
since passed
two decades
I did not take
even those ten

PART THIRD

What I am
trying to say
many diseases
are psychosomatic
keep docs in hand
lest early in your grave
you land
holding only your own hand

PART FOUR

When your heart beat
starts to pound
Meditate
you may take the medicine
the doc says
just in case....
believe him
as he is a specialist
but also pray
and
ask him how from medicine
to stay away
he will simply hmmm
may bray
so happily pass
your tension today

from darkness
and
dark poetry
stay away

Life when one is smiling
and
also making others laugh
lasts
passes
more hopefully at last
may not be that fast!

Hope you will consult the doc
ere he does me blast!

Let Curtain now Fall

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: UNIVERSE...ETERNITY C/O ME, ROU

Favorite Poets: All across the Internet whom I read , and they inspire..

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Comments

jane210660

jane210660

8 years 1 month ago

Blood pressure is certainly

Blood pressure is certainly not a disease, we'd all be dead if we didn't have any.
Slight correction it's memory lane, not memories lane.
I think you have some good points nestling in there Lovedly. I think it could do with a some pruning to condense it a bit though. Jx

lovedly

lovedly

8 years 1 month ago

yes ma'am

I also thought so
memory failed me
know I know
shall do so

will abridge it
can you help me

jane210660

jane210660

8 years 1 month ago

Not just at the moment, as am

Not just at the moment, as am about to go and spend the rest of the day with my mother.
But if you start, then I could drop by later and see where you're at.
Not that I hasten to add, I'm an expert in any way, shape or form.
Enjoy.
Jx

lovedly

lovedly

8 years 1 month ago

why ma'am

Loved then olden times
now+ly==Lovedly
Mark

S

Scatterhatter

8 years 1 month ago

'From darkness

'From darkness
And dark poetry
Stay away'

From this I must abstain....

Hard to follow
but
I find it
thoroughly
enjoyable!

jane210660

jane210660

8 years 1 month ago

I Like

the way you have sectioned your poem.
Am on holiday for a couple of weeks Lovedly, so may not be around as much as usual, as probably won't have wifi.
No doubt I'll catch up with your work when I get back.
Jx