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MY MOTHER
An always around queen
A loving heart with a sight for positivity
An enlightened personality without certificates
That's my mother; fountain of love
She's got a beautiful ebony black skin
And she shines like polished pure leather
A set of eyes you could behold love staring at
Colours aren't worth the description
A calm enduring love
An always forgiving heart
Strong to a fault
Very independent; the pride of pa.
Mom make available without a greed
My mother loves like no other
Her zeal is second to none
Though nature has reduced her heights greedily
Springs of love sprout from her heart
Even in nightmares I hear a faint echo of love singing in her heart
She relents never just for our taste
The queen of hearts, my mother, lives a contented life for all man's joy
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Tracey Underwood
3 years 4 months ago
Loved it
This is a beautiful testament to your mom. It made me think of my mom. I lost her in 2001. There isnt a day that goes by that I dont think of her. Lovely poem! Thanks for sharing.
Anza Matthias …
3 years 3 months ago
Appreciation
Thanks fo reading my work.
Am sorry for not reaching out to you on time.
Candlewitch
3 years 4 months ago
hello,
as Tracey said, "lovely poem" and it is!
*hugs, Cat
*
Anza Matthias …
3 years 3 months ago
Kk
Thanks for reading
Ray Whitaker
3 years 4 months ago
WELCOME to the website!
Nice piece here.
I would add [only] some metaphysical/allegorical imagery that would enhance your writing here.
Anza Matthias …
3 years 3 months ago
Greetings
Thanks for taking your time and going through my work. I really appreciate this.