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Aug 21, 2011
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MY Tears
You flow with a greater force than the Nile river
You do not ask for permission,
Do not even scan the environment,
You just flow .
I have been trying to stop you
If only I had realized sooner,
Realized that you have a mind of your own,
Freedom is what I would have given you.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Not actively editing
Comments
Barbara Writes
13 years 10 months ago
the raw truth
This is the most beautiful heartfelt poem I have ever read. The line where you would have given my tears freedom, really brought the meaning home.
scribbler
13 years 10 months ago
holy moly
now this is poetry.....................stan
raj
13 years 10 months ago
great piece of writing ...
great piece of writing ...
lou
13 years 10 months ago
hI
Well expressed emotion, but two Stanzas are not enough. You have left us wanting more.
lou
introvert
13 years 10 months ago
I actually did not think this
I actually did not think this poem would receive such positive comments as I wrote it in the heat of that moment...to everyone who commented thank you all.
To Yenti,its the small things that really touch the heart,and because you are a human you will cry at such things,lol.
Lou,that's the fun of poetry right there when you wanting more.
Rhiannon1010
12 years 8 months ago
WOW. I love this. The raw
WOW. I love this. The raw emotion of this is breathtaking. Some of the best poetry is written in the heat of the moment, as this is an avenue through which one can imbue the essence of the poem with the life it needs to fly. If the words are the air, emotions are your wings.
I like how short it is. There is definitely something to be said for a short poem that keeps you coming back for more.