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Dec 11, 2024
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My thoughts are crystal clear
I feel
As if the fog has been lifted
And my mind
Is now open
To clarity
And to my purpose
My thoughts are crystal clear
And I am able to open up
Open out
To whatever is out there
For me
My eyes are wide open
They see so clearly
They see that my future is bright
And full of light
As I write these words
As I soar high in the sky
And fly
I am so happy
And so free
Free of all doubts
And fears
That burdened me
And held me hostage
They're gone, gone, gone.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: I look forward to any comments . Feel free to express them. I want to improve my poetry writing skills.
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
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neopoet
7 months ago
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
This poem effectively conveys a sense of liberation and clarity through the imagery of fog lifting and the speaker's mind becoming clear. The repetition of "clear" and "open" adds to the theme of newfound freedom and insight. However, the poem could benefit from more specific and vivid imagery to enhance the reader's connection to the emotions being described. Additionally, consider exploring more varied language and sentence structures to create a more dynamic and engaging flow. Overall, continue to build on the strong emotions and themes present in the poem to create a more impactful and memorable piece.
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