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Sep 03, 2011
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My time is not up yet
In the frolic of
folly i amaze
into metaphorical mystery
i gaze.
Stark naked eyes
unknowing
the blank.
A mysery self-wrought
in the brooks
and
woods walked.
Then the last breath
shall surge
half in half out.
My soul if i have one
may submerge
In the glorification
of time
I thought
was once only mine..
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
weirdelf
13 years 10 months ago
You are getting better and better.
my only crit is the line-
of dare i say
I think is un-necessary. Can you explain to me why it is there?
Love the poem.
Geremia
13 years 10 months ago
I agree with Jess Joe
I agree with Jess
Joe
loved
13 years 10 months ago
and i agree with you both ....thanks
Its so nice to hear comforting words
thanks again all ur good wishes
Roscoe Lane
13 years 10 months ago
Maybe,
Maybe your time has just begaun, nice poem. Regards Roscoe...
loved
13 years 10 months ago
thanks
for this as well as msg pm