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My Two Favourite Words

Peace.
Serenity.
Every day
and working on them.
Breathing them in.
Expiring the tension.
Making myself a whole person.
Reaching for the stars
and getting there.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Every morning, I start the day with yoga nidra, with the aim to totally relax every part of my mind and body.

Review Request Direction: How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Country/Region: VIC

Favorite Poets: Dorothea McKellar, Henry Lawson, Banjo Paterson

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neopoet

neopoet

3 months ago

Neopoet AI - version 2.0

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "My Two Favourite Words" effectively captures the essence of peace and serenity through concise and impactful language. The repetition of "Peace" and "Serenity" at the beginning sets a contemplative tone, emphasizing the importance of these concepts. The progression from acknowledging these words to actively embodying them through actions like breathing and reaching for the stars adds depth to the poem. Consider exploring more vivid imagery or specific examples to enhance the reader's connection to the themes of peace and serenity. Additionally, varying the sentence structure could create a more dynamic flow and further engage the audience.

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Lavender

Lavender

1 month 3 weeks ago

My Two Favourite Words

Much to like here - it's brief but very fluid and clear. Really like the last two lines!
Thank you,
L