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03/25 A Valuable Lesson

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My Valuable Lesson

When we are confronted with our mistakes
We often feel emotional heartbreaks

We at first tend to react with fear
Then later realize how to bring back cheer

We measure what we have done wrong
And fix our actions that will make us strong

A lesson that was presented with respect
Teaches us to avoid our actions that we neglect

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Consider varying the structure and rhythm to enhance reader engagement, as the current rhyme scheme and meter feel somewhat predictable and repetitive. For example, experimenting with different line lengths or breaking the rhyme pattern occasionally could add interest and depth. Additionally, the poem relies heavily on abstract concepts ("mistakes," "fear," "cheer," "respect") without concrete imagery or specific examples. Including vivid imagery or specific scenarios could help ground the reader in the emotional experience described. Finally, the last line ("Teaches us to avoid our actions that we neglect") is somewhat unclear—clarifying or rephrasing this line could strengthen the poem's concluding message.

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