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IN MY VAULT

Soft waves wash across our feet
and wipe our footprints from the sand.
Board walk provides a deep backbeat
from a sixties tribute band.

We've walked along this beach before
and heard the plaintive sea birds cry
as they patrolled this stretch of shore
wheeling within a clear blue sky.

But now my gait is not as fast.
My love slows down because of me
unlike the times far in the past
when we splashed this east coast sea.

Yet the mist still tastes of salt
just the way it did back then
in memories stored in my mind's vault
of how it tasted on your skin.

And as our evening comes on us
I guess the sea spray makes me blind
I see neither wrinkles nor hair mussed
just that young girl clearly in my mind.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost, Burns, Longfellow, Poe, and Johnson. I guess you've noticed these are all past masters. Other than folks on site I don't read any contemporary poets .

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Geezer

Geezer

4 years 9 months ago

A great tribute...

to your dear Susan and one of the peacful, languid places that you two have visited together. It couldn't have been more clear how much you are still in love with both your wife and the beach. Great stuff and a little different from the usual [woods] theme. ~ Gee.
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S

scribbler

4 years 9 months ago

LOL

I guess I write of the woods so much because I'm a knot head lol. But once in a while I tilt my noggin and let some of the sand run out...........

S

scribbler

4 years 9 months ago

Hi Ted

Yeah she waits and keeps on waiting for me for some reason lol. Glad you dropped by

lovedly

lovedly

4 years 9 months ago

This stanly

is great
what would you want me to say
do pl state
and yeah
clearly xx* in my mind....You missed the ISxx*
eagles eyes this poet is

happy veterans day did u read it today

Gracy

Gracy

4 years 5 months ago

Hi Stan, what a romantic poem

Hi Stan, what a romantic poem, the kind I most enjoy. Your love for your wife Susan comes through powerfully. The title, rhyming and all else is perfect. Enjoyed the read.
It's wonderful to visit you all again.
All the best, Gracy

S

scribbler

4 years 5 months ago

Hi Grace

Thank you for your kind words. I'm always a bit surprised when a minor edit on an old poem brings additional readers my way