Neopoem Of The Week July 17th through July 23 2022

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My Wild Rose

You were wild,
A tempest,
Free and unyielding,
A restless soul of great visions,
Loneliness your happy companion,
As you shattered the common,
With ink and pen,
You left us breathless,
As you breathed into us,
A new beginning,
For those who loved without regret,
And lived without fear.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: For the writer who writes fearlessly.

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Not actively editing

About the Author

Comments

Candlewitch

2 years 11 months ago

dear C Wolff,

I love your imagery. it jumps right off the page at me! the beauty of this poem feels pristine and pure. inspiring... I want some...

*hugs, Cat

C. Wolff

2 years 11 months ago

Thank you so much! :)

Geezer

2 years 11 months ago

Wild roses...

a favorite of mine. I like the simplicity and untamed feeling of this. Nothing that I would change. If I haven't welcomed you personally, welcome to Neo. ~ Geezer.
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C. Wolff

2 years 11 months ago

Thank you so much!

Rosewood Apothecary

2 years 11 months ago

Keep ‘em coming

Another great offering. My suggestion if any would be

You left us gasping,
As you breathed into us,

Choose any word you feel works. Conversely could change the verb “breathed” in the second of those lines. It’s a matter of sounding redundant with to forms of the verb “to breathe” only separated by a few words.

Other than that it’s another amazing poem,
Tim

C. Wolff

2 years 11 months ago

Thank you for the feedback!

Thank you for the feedback! Much appreciated :)

Lavender

2 years 11 months ago

My Wild Rose

Hello, C.Wolff,

A very passionate poem. It always surprises me how poetry reveals itself while in the process of writing it. I feel the revelation here, almost like an awakening. That "aha" moment that leaves us breathless.

For me, I am wondering if I would feel a little more apt to "live without regret, and love without fear", but I still understand the inspiration.

Thank you!

Lavender