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Steamboat_Denny
Steamboat_Denny
Dec 23, 2024 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Mycelium Monks

Throughout the rainy season
Mushrooms emerge from the soil
Beside mighty trees and from our own lawns
Thriving wherever there's moisure

Bringing traffic to the forest in the shape of orange-vested foragers
With a basket in one hand and Opinel knife in the other
Some looking for garnishes for their steaks
And others out for a quick buck

Beneath a cloister of moss or salal
Lucky chanterelles may be spared
Sequestered away like monks in Tibet or the Alps
Growing as much as they can before returning to the Earth

About This Poem

Last Few Words: This is a piece I've been working on. I'd like to get it published, I feel the subject is suitable for a lot of journals

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Washington, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Billy Collins, Mary Oliver, Lucia Perillo, William Blake, Khalil Gibran, Jorge Luis Borges, Samuel Taylor Coleridge, Emily Dickinson, Don Freas, Jackie Morris, Nathalie Kuroiwa-Lewis

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neopoet

neopoet

6 months ago

Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The imagery in your poem is vivid and evocative, painting a picture of the emergence of mushrooms during the rainy season. The comparison of mushrooms to monks in Tibet or the Alps adds a layer of depth to the poem. However, there are a few areas where you could enhance the poem. Consider exploring the theme of impermanence further, tying in the idea of mushrooms growing before returning to the Earth. Additionally, you might want to experiment with the structure of the poem to create a more impactful flow. Overall, your poem shows promise and with some refinement, it could become even more engaging.

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Ruby Lord

Ruby Lord

6 months ago

I did enjoy this. It confirms

I did enjoy this. It confirms what I learned not too long ago and my understanding of the "woodwide web" a phrase formed by the German forester Peter Wohlleben. Ruby xxx :)