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Sep 04, 2011
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Naked- Writing with Emotion Workshop
Abrupt intake of idolatry
as softly, languid eyes imbibe
each facet.
You invade reality
stunning my logic,
hooking yourself into my resistance.
The essence of my existence
the crux of it all.
You are woven into every fibre
Impetuous, perilous, sensation
as I expose the delicate under belly,
Naked, open to you.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
lou
13 years 10 months ago
Yes
well that explains the state of my love life LMAO!!!
Lou
Geezer
13 years 10 months ago
It sounds...
as though you are trying to describe a liason with someone who just knocks you off your feet with raw sexual power! Not someone you are in love with, but someone whom you cannot resist. I was very taken with the language, the words were all very powerful and yet there was a submissive tone to it. Very satisfiying! ~ Gee
lou
13 years 10 months ago
Gee
Then a re-write is in order lol
Thank you
love lou
Candlewitch
13 years 10 months ago
Hi Lou,
I agree a great lust poem. (almost adiction!) I think it has superb emotion and imagery.
Impetuous, perilous, sensation
as I expose the delicate under belly,
Naked, open to you.
love, Cat