raj

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Namaste

At dusk
my palms join,
I look east then west,
In welcome and farewell,
I open them
chanting mantras of gratitude.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Somewhere in the world, IND

Comments

lovedly

6 years 7 months ago

Very nice could you not make it to read

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What is it called
it's on the tip of my mind
just a slip away.......

raj

6 years 7 months ago

It is popularly known as

It is popularly known as Namaste but at times Namaskar. Thanks for reading Lovedly.
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raj

6 years 7 months ago

for reading and your good words...I wasn't aware that you are part of Neopoet's Social Media team until I saw just now that you found this worthy to include in the "potential submissions to instagram" folder with a nice picture of dusk....i thank you and IRiz for this initiative...she too creates great pics..

thanks again..
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lovedly

6 years 7 months ago

How is it raj ?-memory loss no no ACROSTIC no dementia yet

N ew day all adorn
A nother one will be born
M y salaams to the one gone
E ast is the early dawn
S un the West is about to gulp
T hen we will offer divine prayers
E ven Lord wants me now to rest

I shal remove it once you have read raj

raj

6 years 7 months ago

appreciate your effort

appreciate your effort Lovedly...thanks
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lovedly

6 years 7 months ago

high raj

a and e interpolated
You want me to remove it
say so pl I will

IRiz

6 years 7 months ago

Raj

Raj
I like the idea of the poem very much!
My only concern is the structure of your sentences.
Take a look I wrote this as a suggestion to make better flow. I keep the essence of the poem.

At dusk
my palms join.
I look east then west.
In welcome and farewell
I open them
chanting greatful mantras.

raj

6 years 7 months ago

Thanks friend IRiz for the

Thanks friend IRiz for the wonderful suggestive change...appreciated and will be implemented...i will just check if it should be greatful or grateful....

i changed the concluding line from "chanting grateful mantras" to "chanting mantras of gratitude"
...please tell me which one is better and has a better flow?

Thanks again..
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IRiz

6 years 7 months ago

my friend, you know better,

my friend, you know better, this is your poetry
i am just super tired and trying (not always the best way) to help
hugs

i love you last draft very much, let's ask Mark to redo your insta-post

raj

6 years 7 months ago

Hey IRiz

very much appreciate your tireless efforts dear friend as too your guidance..Mark may do the post if it's not too much trouble...

warmly..
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IRiz

6 years 7 months ago

Namaste

raj

6 years 7 months ago

Namaste to you too IRiz..

Namaste to you too IRiz..
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raj

6 years 7 months ago

Namaste Mark...appreciate

Namaste Mark...appreciate your help
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raj

6 years 7 months ago

Mark

you are spot on about ...if you are going to redo the post on instagram please correct that and you may as well get rid of punctuation marks as suggested by IRiz...

thanks mate...
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