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NATURE
Hunger
the daily companion
motivating the hunter
urging him beyond his endurance
to kill
At last cutting a deer's track
by spoor, a fresh passage
cloven prints in fresh snow
indicating the way to go
Decision :
speed to catch up with the prize
or stealth to insure surprise ?
compromise
rapid progress with still pauses
sixth sense now screaming
heart pounding
pulse racing
mouth watering
prey is near
Time to get down wind of trail
there.....he......is
unaware and slowly feeding
keep a large tree between us
only move when his head is down
old, tired, buck
intent on recouping rut's lost weight
A
L
M
O
S
T
........there
POUNCE !!
As savage teeth tear into throat
savoring salty taste of hot blood
he's down but not yet dead
as feast begins
Later
satiated, meat carried home
to bitch and litter
a good day's hunt
but there will come tomorrow and tomorrow
and renewed hunger
( just realized I had not done my weakly free verse)
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
raj
14 years 5 months ago
Dear Stan
the imagery is so vivid that i followed your trail into the wilderness of your imagination. ....
scribbler
14 years 5 months ago
hey raj
just thought I'd show that nature is not all pretty and fluffy bunnies.................stan
scribbler
14 years 5 months ago
nature
hope they didn't leave hoof prints on your car hood lol..............stan
scribbler
14 years 5 months ago
nature
form isn't that hard or fancy. glad your encounter didn't result in much damage...............stan
scribbler
14 years 5 months ago
nature
It's convenient to be able to blame heat on being addled lmao. I have a hard time telling difference between blank and free verse...................stan
Geezer
14 years 5 months ago
i don't know about...
the form, but would say that WEAKLY, doesn't describe it! [I'm sure that you meant weekly.] I was held by your tale of the hunt, and was a little surprised to have it turn out to be a wolf that was hunting, and not you. Great work, as usual, ~ Gee
scribbler
14 years 5 months ago
hey Geez
I always consider my free verse skills to be weak ( or other skills for that matter) lol. Glad you liked this..................scribbler
loved
14 years 5 months ago
ditto
fabulous comment by RAJ
scribbler
14 years 5 months ago
nature
thank you loved.......................scribbler