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Rula
Rula
Dec 15, 2022 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)
This poem is part of the challenge:

December 2022 Random Challenge Naughty or Nice 🏆 Winner

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Naughty Or Nice (December Contest)

I don't know if
you find it naughty,
but I find it nice,
Gazing into the beauty
of the quiet naked skies.

I find it nice to sneak
through the shining stars;
those to be closer
and many other afar.

I'll be stealing a look
onto the sleepy moon,
for it makes me flying
Like a musical tune.

And yes,
if you find it naughty,
I find it nice,
staring in your beauty,
not only once ,
but a million times.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Jordan, JOR

Favorite Poets: I favor the ones who are closer to humanity and , Poets are humanity when the world lose it.

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Comments

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

2 years 6 months ago

dear Rula,

a great entry and answer to the challenge! it sounds even better when read out loud, it rolls right off the tongue!

*love & hugs, Cat

Rula

Rula

2 years 6 months ago

Dearest Candlewhich

I am grateful for the your kind comments. I am happy to know it has your approval.
Thank you so much.

Rosewood Apothecary

Rosewood Apothecary

2 years 6 months ago

Interesting

What a really unconventional approach to that challenge and a really great poem. Awesome idea, good execution. Like Cat said a breeze to read. It just pulls you right along.

Tim

Rula

Rula

2 years 6 months ago

Hello Tim

Thank you so much for your non endong encouraging words. You made my day with such a comment
Always grateful sir.

Lavender

Lavender

2 years 6 months ago

Naughty or Nice

Hi, Rula,
This has a lovely feel to it, softly traveling upward and beyond. Beautiful final line!
L

Rula

Rula

2 years 6 months ago

Dearest Lavender

Your kind comments warms my heart and urges my muse to bring more.
Always appreciate your feedback and comments

Rula

Rula

2 years 6 months ago

Dear Lovedly

You're so kind. Your comment adds to my happiness.
Thank you!

lovedly

lovedly

2 years 6 months ago

In the hour of sadness

there lies only one path
of sowing down
seeds of happiness

Time will just pass
and perfumes of Roses
towards the sky cast

as long as watering lasts
ma'am

E

Emerald1

2 years 6 months ago

Amazing

Such a creative take on the prompt , reads so beautifully with exquisite imagery , a delightful starlight filled experience /read

Rula

Rula

2 years 6 months ago

Thank you dear

for the kind visit. I wish all to join the party.
Looking forward to reading of your work.

RoseBlack

RoseBlack

2 years 5 months ago

A unique

Way of tackling this challenge and beautifully written as always.

Seren

Seren

2 years 4 months ago

Dear Rula

This is just Gorgeous. I'm so taken with this one.

Congratulations on your win it's much deserved my friend.

Wow I am still there.

Love Jayne x