A Near Disaster

5%...
Where’s my charger?
4%...
Where’s the outlet?
3%...
Where’s my phone?
2%...
I found the charger!
1%...
I found my phone!
I plug it in.
1 hour 52 minutes…

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Kentucky, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allen Poe, Maya Angelou, Emily Dickenson

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Comments

neopoet

1 year ago

Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem effectively captures the frantic search for a charger and outlet as the phone battery dwindles. The repetition of percentages creates a sense of urgency and the relief at finding the charger and phone is palpable. However, the poem could benefit from further exploration of emotions or reflections during this experience to deepen its impact on the reader. Consider delving into the feelings of frustration, panic, or relief in more detail to enhance the narrative. Additionally, experimenting with different poetic devices such as imagery or metaphor could add layers of complexity to the poem.

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