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Oct 22, 2018
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FOR NEOPOET
Fire a thousand salute for Neopoet
a ten thousand salute for our fallen heroes
though you've left suddenly like a gathering cloud
but your pen stands,
your comments fresh like the morning wine
your inspiration, your insight give births in our mind.
double a ten thousand salute for Neopoet
let the earthquake and heavens shake
poetry is our culture we live it
rivers of colours indeed, we are
in my next world bring me here
if i will die bury me here.
About This Poem
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
weirdelf
6 years 8 months ago
if i will die bury me here. Yep, me too.
Passionate and well written, Chiori, but I have to admit I don't like reflexive Poetry. Poetry about poetry,, poetry about being a poet and especially about Neopoet.
You are forgiven, I adore this place myself.
Geezer
6 years 8 months ago
Likewise...
Me too!
~ Geezer.
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Chiori
6 years 8 months ago
yep
yep
Simon
6 years 2 months ago
Neopoet
Is like a heaven on earth I never will mind dying and been buried in it as well as others also does from there writing continues.
Marthalyn
6 years 1 month ago
I agree with Jess however
Your rhythm is exceptional with an easy flow and you have used nicely descriptive words. I tried reading it without the first line on each stanza and the verse was far more poignant. I know a few Nigerian writers and I agree, "poetry is our culture we live it". Perhaps you might change the title to something that reflects that.
Thank you for sharing your work.