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Jan 08, 2023
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Neopoet Challenge: In My Element
Cusp born Aquarian/Pisces Air and Water
a crazy mix, but a Gemini married me.
Air for Air we mesh, but Pisces goes alone
into my moody reverie in loving poetry.
Gemini, the thinker and the child,
when at rest his nose is in a book.
when he toils, his mind is put to task
at cosmic problems he will always take a look.
he affords me my space to create
with my moon in Cancer, the adolescent I feel
Aquarius, Idealism, I know, Pisces, I believe,
when I consider it all, it's not a bad deal.
About This Poem
Review Request Direction:
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - draft
Comments
Rosewood Apothecary
2 years 5 months ago
Interesting take
Had a few periodic table poems, and a few about nature or the weather. This is original and I expect that from you. I’m Scorpio born in the cusp of Sagittarius. I don’t know what that means except I’m a very intensely connected to my surroundings and my thoughts (even when it’s garbage thinking). I always love your spin on things.
Tim
Candlewitch
2 years 5 months ago
hey Tim,
off the top of my head, and this is real general: you are stubborn and you have a fire in you belly. I'll go look it up and get back to you on it. thanks for the vote of confidence :)
*hugs, Cat
Candlewitch
2 years 5 months ago
dear Tim,
from "Linda Goodman's Love Signs" (which tells about the mixing of pairings) if you tell me your wife's sun sign I can tell you about your relationship, too.
check out this site:
https://www.astrology.com/on-the-cusp/scorpio-sagittarius
*hugs, Cat
Candlewitch
2 years 5 months ago
dear Tim,
WHAT HAPPENS WHEN that dark and intense Scorpio energy meets the bold and active Sagittarius? It's a wild combination, a rebel yell, and it's not for the faint of heart.
Ruled by Pluto, Mars, and Jupiter, those born on the Scorpio-Sagittarius cusp live to go against the grain. Tell them that it's done one way and they'll show you how it's done the other. These are self-taught experts, and they learn by doing. They are the wild child of the Zodiac — but what happens when that child grows up? When the rebel becomes the ruler?
from the site. but much more there.
Rosewood Apothecary
2 years 5 months ago
Ha ha
I’m a 44 year old boy. Self taught musician on 5 instruments and voice, sound engineer, artist/painter, writer. I can grow food and lovely cannabis, carpentry (frame to finish), cabinet making, i roof and side buildings (I was into slate and copper roofs for decade). All learned by jumping in the fire. I don’t work on cars but I fix all my small engines…
I’m a nightmare to be around at times, I’m making strides though. There’s definitely a war always brewing inside. I used to drink a lot. Now I mainly cry and write. I’m ok with that. It’s led me right back to myself. Chaos but familiar. No running.
Candlewitch
2 years 5 months ago
dear boy....
you forgot one thing...YOU are a treasure!
*hugs, Cat
Rosewood Apothecary
2 years 5 months ago
Hugs back
Thank you for helping me to see that
Lavender
2 years 5 months ago
In My Element
Hello, Cat,'
A very different approach to the element contest! Interesting, and well done!
L
Candlewitch
2 years 5 months ago
dear Lavender,
thank you for your vote of confidence. it is greatly appreciated!
*hugs, Cat
RoseBlack
2 years 5 months ago
All the elements
Of the cosmos....I am a cancer and still haven't found who I mesh with...I've been through Virgo and Leo so far. Maybe Gemini?
Rula
2 years 5 months ago
Hello dearest Cat
A wonderful write. Though as a Muslim I don't believe in horoscope as it is only guesses, but I like your take. I thought it is an out of the box writing
You guys are giving hard times to the judges, really!
Bravooooo!
Rula
2 years 5 months ago
Hello dearest Cat
A wonderful write. Though as a Muslim I don't believe in horoscope as it is mere guesses, but I like your take.of the title and I thought it is an out of the box writing
You guys are giving hard times to the judges, really!
Bravooooo!