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Jan 04, 2025
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The Neopoet Family
I'm a member,
Of the Neopoet Family.
What a wonderful family it is.
And what a wonderful place it is,
To leave your personal mark.
In this family,
You feel the arms,
Around you,
Embracing you,
And encouraging you,
To be creative.
Their warm embrace,
Gives you hope and strength,
To continue,
And to just BE.
This message,
For me,
Has been particularly special.
The raw emotions,
I have exposed,
In flaunting my life journey,
Have kept me,
Together,
In a calm way.
That warm embrace,
Gave me confidence,
And strength,
To start a conversation,
About the way I feel,
And what I wanted to do.
This location,
Surrounded by,
Other tortured souls,
Like myself,
Gave me,
A sense of freedom,
And purpose SIMULTANEOUSLY.
To all the other Neopoets,
Out there,
I warmly welcome you,
Into my life,
The same way,
You have done,
For me.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Hello to all the Neopoets out there who have given me a platform to express my highs, lows and all the other emotions and feelings I want to express. I wrote this poem to acknowledge the place you have in my creative and very private life, which is no longer so private, even with my pen name. I have opened up about the most personal moments in my life, including the professional session with the first name of the professional emblazened in many of my poems. I am fearless in Neopoet. This place has given me wings to fly with. This is what I am expressing with this very special poem to all of you in my wonderful poetry community. I genuinely feel the love and support I have had from the very beginning that I joined it. It has given me the strength and confidence to read my poems at open poem mic nights. It also means that I realize that I am back from the depths in which I found myself, and I love that feeling.
Review Request Direction:
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
neopoet
6 months 1 week ago
Neopoet AI (premium) - 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "The Neopoet Family" effectively conveys a sense of community and mutual support. However, the poem could benefit from a more varied vocabulary and more vivid imagery. The repeated use of phrases like "warm embrace" and "family" can become monotonous, and the poem might be more engaging if it used more specific, concrete language to describe the Neopoet community and the speaker's experiences within it.
The poem's structure is also somewhat repetitive, with many short lines and stanzas. This can create a rhythmic effect, but it can also make the poem feel disjointed. The poem might flow better if it used longer lines or stanzas, or if it varied the length and structure of its lines and stanzas more.
The poem does a good job of expressing the speaker's emotions and experiences, but it could do more to engage the reader's senses. For example, instead of simply stating that the Neopoet community is a "wonderful place," the poem could describe the sights, sounds, or feelings that make it wonderful.
Finally, the poem's message could be clearer. It's not entirely clear what the speaker means by "the way I feel" or "what I wanted to do." The poem might be more impactful if it provided more specific examples or details about the speaker's feelings and desires.
Please send feedback about Neo (our computer generated critique system) to https://www.neopoet.com/contact
Rula
6 months 1 week ago
Hello Gogetter
and a warm welcome to Neopoet.
I can't agree more. This is a real haven for poets around the world. I've been to some other through my writing journey, but here I find the honest feedback to grow and improve my verses. I wish you an enjoyable stay.
Looking forward to reading more from your quill.Thank you for sharing your raw feelings.
The Gogetter
6 months 1 week ago
Thanking you so much for your response Rula
I wrote a long response, but not in the reply section. Your thoughts mean so much for me. I am glad to have discovered a site like Neopoet with the humanity that it demonstates for me . It gives me hope. This relatively new skill for me, only at the end of 2024 has worked so well for me. It is good to have other poets like yourself on my side and conversing with me about how I write my poems, as well as boosting me on a personal level.
The Gogetter
6 months 1 week ago
I feel the humanity of Neopoet
You were fast Rula. I enjoy the humanity of Neopoet. You can instinctively sense the companionship of the other poets in this community. There is a real bond between us all, no matter what our experience in life has been. I still do the tortured stuff online, but I am adding some lighter poems, which gives me a breather. Even though I sought out and successfully underwent professional assistance with my anxiety ( at least I can admit this openly now), I know my poetry is the main source of my growth and development not only of my poetry , but also my mental wellbeing, a word I never thought would come from my lips. Even as a parent, I always confronted what was bothering me. This time, it took three years to confront my own issues. Neopoet came along for me, together with the discovery that I could plumb the depths and write poems, at just the right time for me. I appreciate your generosity in giving the time to make this comment.
Lavender
6 months 1 week ago
Hello, Gogetter,
A lovely sentiment I think many of us share. The love of poetry brings us together in many ways!
Thank you!
L
The Gogetter
6 months 1 week ago
I always look forward to your comments
I always enjoy receiving any response from you Lavender. We all appreciate the support you give us. I still have so many poems I want to choose from to enter.